Thanks for looking at it, though, even if it didn't make sense. It was just an isolated scene, not part of a longer story yet, though I might still add to it. What did you mean that you didn't understand the genre? It's supposed to be fantasy. The subject was an argument between a man and a woman about another world. One wants to keep it secret and the other doesn't.
I guess that sci-fi and fantasy get mixed up in my mind. I was expecting sci-fi (I don't know why) and the story seems fantasy with a bit of sci-fi (planets make me think sci-fi) added. I didn't notice the present tense and is that a good thing? I was more into the story than anything else. Most curious about Jose. His past and what he will learn from Marai.
I wrote a story in the present tense when I was in high school. It was my decision to do it that way. The story was shit so any marks I got were probably for the unexpected use of present tense.
Your story needs editing to clear up who says what and the transition between Jose and Marai/man whose name I have forgotten already, ( 
me ). You already know this but I would definitely like to read more if that is ok.
If the creative part of your brain is missing, how come you like Stargate? I thought it took creativity or imagination of some kind to enjoy SF.
With visual sci-fi I am just receiving and it doesn't take a lot of imagination for me, but I do need to understand it or I am lost. I had to watch The Fifth Element three times before I understood it. Star Trek moves slow to me, Stargate is faster and so sometimes I have to watch an episode a number of times to "get it". I just process information slowly at times I think.
Reading is different. Probably why the transition from novel to movie can end in disaster, "the book is better". To me, The Lord of the Rings trilogy was torture to read. Two pages to describe a hillside? I couldn't see. It was like reading through a fog and knowing some great things were going on and I was missing out. I could see in your story, Pyraxis.
I can speed-read at times. I can proof-read and sort of edit.
I find it very hard to write. There are too many images/ideas to translate into words. The way I was taught to write in school was not the way for me learn. I read a lot but I hardly ever write.
Okay, let me try a response, through a haze of fucking-hell-it's-way-too-early-in-the-morning.
I should probably take out the bit about planets. It's not supposed to be sci-fi. The technology isn't near as advanced as earth.
I'm really glad you could see the story.
There is more written but not about Jose yet. I'll see if I can get some more ready. This stuff is mostly done for fun, I'm not thinking about publishing or anything, because like Odeon said at one point, once you post on a forum you've already used electronic rights.
If you ever did write something I'd want to read it. It's better to learn these things your own way, I think, than at school. Most of what I learned was on my own. School teaches you to write boring formulaic essays and that's about it.
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